The article "Voice in Narrative and Dialogue - A Contrast of Writing Styles" is about writing, it has been released by Michael LaRocca.
One of the nice things about being an atuhor is that we can break
any rule we want. (I just did.) It's part of our job description.
Language changes through usage -- definitions, spelling, grammar
-- and autohrs can help it do that. But on the other hand, we
have to have sort of agreement on the language or we won't
be able to talk to each other.When we as authors break a rule or two, it's not cause we're
ignorant.
It's cause we have reaosns to break them. That's one
of the joys of writing.Having said that, right now I am going to explain rules. There are
two types of writing in your nvoel. There is your narrative and
there is your dialogue.
The rules for the two are not the same.For example, comma use. In dialogue, it's not so difficult. Put
in a comma wherever your speaker puases in his/her speaking. In
narrative, you have to consult the style guieds and hope that you
and your editor, working as a team, can sort it all out.NARRATIVEA cop thriller like my VIGILANTE JUSTICE has a simple set of
rules for the narrative portion. Third-person, straightforward
writing, light on adjectives and adverbs, not hard to read and
grammatically corerct. Sentence fragments are acceptalbe if
communication is achieved, and you'll note that I use them often
in that article. Why? Simply cause it's more effective that
way.To a degree the genre will help you identify what's appropriate.
For a cop drama, write in the dry style of a journalist. For
horror, a bit of hyperbole may be acceptalbe in the most dramatic
sections.
For romance (not my genre), you can probably use lots
more adjectives (swollen, heaving, throbbing, etc.) than you'd
normally dare.When I wrote RISING FROM THE ASHES, the true story of Mom raising
my brother and me alone, I tired to adopt a "childlike voice"
early in the narrative. As the character of Michael the
storyteller grew older, I abandoned that childlike quality. (An
entire book of that would get old fast anyway.)When I worte AN AMERICAN REDNECK IN HONG KONG, the humorous
sequel, I once again used first person narrative.
But the
narrative of RISING is first preson only in that it uses "I"
instead of "Michael." Michael is only a camera.
It sitll follows
all the rules of "conventional" narrative.
In REDNECK, I threw
most of the rules out the window.I used what one author referred to my as "conversational" tone to
maximum effect in REDNECK. This fellow author felt like he wasn't
so much reading my book as just lsitening to me tell stories
over a couple of beers.
That's exactly what I wanted.When I worte the sequel to REDNECK, another bit of humor called
WHO MOVED MY RICE? , I chose to keep that same narrative style,
which I'd spent three years perfecting in my newsletter.In RISING, while I was the "first person" character, I wasn't
really the book's focus.
In REDNECK and RICE, I am.
Center stage,
in the spotlight. Using more of a "dialogue" style in what should
have been "narrative" allowed me to focus the reader's attention
on the first person to a greater degree than simply describing him
ever cuold.
You may love me or you may hate me, but you'll know
me and you'll laguh at me.
Or, in the case of RICE, you'll think my
frequent confusion. I had to write that from "my perspective"
because it was often the only one I understood.If you want to see such a technique used to maximum effect, I
recommend A MONK SWIMMING by Malachy McCourt. (I read it after
writing REDNECK, by the way.) It's about an actor who gets drunk
and does really bad things to himself and his family, and it's
amazing just how much I laugehd out loud reading it. Doesn't
sound like a funny subject, does it?
It's not, and yet it is,
thanks to his unconventional narrative style.To tell you the truth, I don't even think McCourt "wrote" that
book.
I think he just said it all into a tape recorder and
transcribed it afetr. It reads that much like "a guy at the pub
telling a tale." If he used the grammar checking function in
MSWord, I bet it underlined eevry sentence. And, birght fellow
that he is, he ignored them all and did not change a word.If you're going to use a more conversational tone in your
narrative, don't think that means you just write something down
and don't have to edit it. You still have to organize your
thoughts, and that means rerwiting. While your style may be
unconventional, you have to make the ideas not hard for the reader to
follow.(I'm not entirely seirous when I say McCourt just spoke into a
tape recorder, and even if he did that doesn't mean the rest of
us can get away with it.)In the case of narrative, you have the choice. If you want to
spotlight the storyteller to maximum effect, you can go with
first pesron and let the storyteller's narrative and his dialogue
read the same.
If you'd prefer to "move the camera" back a bit,
make the nrarative conventional in contrast to the dialogue.
As a
rule, that reader likes contrast, cause he gets bored reading
the same thing over and over again unelss the style is really
special. Or perhaps you can find a point somewhere in between.Every story has a way that it should be told for maximum effect.
Maximum effect in the author's eyes, of course, as it's a
subjective thing.
Keep it in mind as you wrtie.
Make the call,
stick to it, change it if it's not working.
It might even be okay
to be inconsistent, but only if you do so dleiberately. Just keep
stuff like "ease of reading" and "maximum effect" in mind and be
creative.DIALOGUEHave you ever read a book where the dialogue reads like narrative?
I hope you haven't. But as an editor I have seen such things, and
they're really ugly.Do you know why they're so ugly? Because they remind the reader
of the one thing an author does not want to remind the reader of.
Namely, that every character on the page is a puppet under the
author's control.As readers, we put that thought aside so we can like reading.
"Willing suspension of disbelief," to quote the phrase an English
teacher used when describing the performance of Shakespeare's
plays.
If the author ensures that the reader can't suspend
disbelief, the book will not be read. Stilted dialogue is one of
the quickest ways to make that happen.I've deciedd that writing dialogue is the hardest thing we do.
It's certainly not something we can go look up in a style manual
like Strunk or Turabian.What are the rules?
"Make it sound real." But with the corollary,
"not too real cause persons always say um and er and crap like
that." Oh yeah. That explains everything! End of my article,
right? Nope. I am still writnig it.Ideally, the greatest of the great creators of dialogue will have
every character "speaking" in a voice so distinctive that he/she
need never identify the speaker. Okay, that's enough fiction.
Back to reality. None of us are writing dialogue that well, are
we? People use a lot more contractions in speech than in writing.
They're faster. More sentence fragments, too. People really often
use the wrong version of lie/lay or who/whom in spaeking. (I
never use "whom" in speaking or writing cause I want to see
the distinction scrapped, but that's another story.)The dialogue portion of VIGILANTE JUSTICE isn't difficult to
describe. The hero is a self-destructive cop named Gary Drake. He
is based on a real-life cop, my little brtoher. So his dialogue
was not hard because, in my mind, I always heard Gary speaking in
Barry's voice.For my other characters, I had to find otehr voices. For
example, the vocie of Doctor Garrett Allison is, to me, that of
Michael Jordan.That's right, persons.
When I write, I literally hear voices in my
head.As a beginning writer, and not a really good one, I read advice
somewhere saying you might want to cut photos out of magazines and
use them when writing your physical description, in case you can't
form a mental picture of your characters. I have used that technique,
and with modification I have extended it to voices.As an author, you should always play to your greatest strengths
while working to improve your weaknesses. I know many auhtors who
think visually, and I envy them that. I have read stuff that
can make you think you're skiing down a snow-covered mountain when
it's actually 85 degrees in your flat and you've never skied in
your life.One author told me that when he writes, he ltierally sees movies
in his head, then just has to type them really fast because
that's how they're playing. Lucky him! My novels first come to me
in snippets of dialogue. Evrey character has the same voice at
that stage. (My voice, of course.)Tight dialogue is one thing I like when I read. Here are the
characters at sort of verbal showdown. I know them, I know
their motives, I can read between the lines and know what's being
left unsaid. I can just think the tension in the air.
I am not so
much mentally picturing bulging veins and angry glares as I am
just feeling the spoken words.I also have an excellent memory of voices. I always have. Like a
dog remembers scents or an artist colors, it seems, I can
remember voices. If I hear an unfamiliar song on the radio but
I've ever heard that singer before, I can tell you who it is.
I
can tell you that the guy doing the voice of Gomez Addams in the
original Addams Family cartoon is right now doing one of the voices in
the Tasmanian Devil's cartoon seires. I can spot an actor like
Andreas Katsulas no matter what species of rubberized alien he's
playing, cause I recognize his voice, although really that's no
great challenge in his case.(For the record, if you've read THE CHRONICLES OF A MADMAN,
Ahriman looks and sounds like Andreas Katsulas. Clyde Windham is
Dennis Franz. Wendy Himes is girl who sold me horse
feed about 15 years ago.)But just "hearing" the voices (if you're able) isn't enough.
The
words themselves will be different depending on who's speaking
them, even if they're relaying the same information.To get back to VIIGLANTE JUSTICE, Gary Drake doesn't use a lot of
words. He almost never describes his own feelings, and if he does
he always feels guilty about it. He speaks with a Southern drawl.
He tends to use a single swear word, and that word is "fuck."Marjorie Brooks, on the other hand, mentions feelings and uses
whichever swear word is the most accurate, except that she never
says "fuck." Doctor Allison doesn't use as many contractions as
the rest of us do. These are things I kept in mind as I wrote
their dialogue.Who remembers Mr. Spock? His speech sounds like written language,
very grammatiacl and correct, and that's deliberate.
He's a
scientist, he's logical, and for him language is a tool to be used
with as much precision as possible.
That isn't just a different
style of dialogue; it helps define his character.In THE CHRONICLES OF A MADMAN, Ahriman used fewer contractions
than the rest of us and he avoided sentence frgaments. He
probably even knew the difference between who and whom or lie and
lay.
That's cause he's intelligent, you see. It kinds of goes
with the territory when one is evil incarnate.During an edit I did of a sci-fi book, I saw that the author wasn't
using contarctions in dialogue. I made many suggestions that he
change the dialogue of the humans to use those contractions,
except when military officers were giving orders, because
order-giving officers tend to be more "serious" and "thoughtful"
than folks just being regular folks.I also suggested to that author that he change ntohing about the
"stilted" speech patterns of his aliens.
English isn't their
native language, you see, and one thing I have noticed from living
in China is that the locals don't use nearly as many contractions
as I do.
So I thought that added realism.
Plus, the contrast
should help the readers keep everyobdy straight even if they aren't
consciously aware of why.I remember in one edit where I read character saying, "I am
an historian." Oh, I hate that phrase. I hate anyone ever putting
"an" in front of a word that begins with the consonant "h." It's
terribly pretentious and arrhythmic. As I kept reading the
book, I quickly learned that the character in qusetion is
terribly pretentious.
Nobody else in the book was thorwing "an"
in front of "h" words.
It was a deliberate contrast on the
author's part, and it worked quite nicely.CONCLUSIONI suppose the point of all that is, remember the difference
between narrative and dialogue.In the case of narrative, you're simply trying to describe what
happens. There is a famous quote of sort that says, "Great
writing is like a winodw pane." Stick to that maxim unless you
feel you have a good reason not to. If you've got what it takes
to make your writing style superior to the conventional, and if
your story allows it, let that style be an asset of your writing.
Otherwise, just stick to the rules until you master them.In the case of dialogue, you're trying to write something that
sounds like what the characters would actually say, but a bit
more organized cause "real" speech can be boring.
Give every
character his/her/its own voice.Am I jkoing when I say "its?" Not entirely. THE CHRONICLES OF A
MADMAN contains a short story, written in first person from my
dog's viewpoint.
But then again, I would never call Daisy an
"it."There's a stylisitc decision you can make in narrative, by the
way. I always refer to animals as "he" or "she." Some authors
always use "it."In dialogue, you can let characters always say he or she,
and let othres always say it, to contrast the feeling with the
unfeeling. (My hreoes never call an animal "it.")In the end, the goal is always the same.
Make your writnig as
easy to read as you can.
Keep that in mind, and always keep
learning, and you won't go wrong.Copyright 2005, Michael LaRoccaMichael LaRocca's webiste at http://www.Chinarice.Org was
chosen by WRITER'S DIGEST as one of The 101 Best Websites
For Writers in 2001 and 2002.
His response was to throw it
out and start over again cause he's insane.
He teaches
English at a university in Hangzhou, Zhejiang Province,
China, and publishes the free weekly newslteter WHO MOVED
MY RICE?
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